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Stealthclaw of WindClan « Thread Started on Jan 26, 2007, 7:46pm »
Name: Stealthclaw Age:16 moons Gender:she cat Clan:windclan Rank:warrior Description:lithe, pretty, Dark tabby with amber eyes. she has a small scar along her muzzle. her tail is very long and it has a white tip. her claws are abnormally sharp and long. Picture Link: http://www.eplumsystem.com/pictures/20060311_rw_5412.jpg Personality: she is kind and soft hearted. in battle she is the fierced of all the warriors. stealthclaw enjoys watching the kits and secretly wants some of her own but doesn't know if she could handle the responsibility. History:stelthclaw was born during a blizzard. her two sisters, who were never named, died soon after birth . before she got her warrior name her name was tigerpaw but on a mission to spy on bloodclan to prove that they were stealing prey from their territory they changed her name to stealthpaw then she recirved her warrior name Stealthclaw. Other: no other Passwords: silverpelt starclan
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Re: Stealthclaw « Reply #1 on Jan 27, 2007, 9:54am »
A few things. Your grammar could use a little work, and I think perhaps you could elaborate a little more on her history. Especially what happened in blood clan. And think you could use a sentence or two more on the personality. Sorry if I sound like a nag.
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. before she got her warrior name her name was tigerpaw but on a mission to spy on bloodclan to prove that they were stealing prey from their territory they changed her name to stealthpaw then she recirved her warrior name Stealthclaw.
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